task1

ha70 08/January/2010, 18:15

I'm trying my best to practise writing skill. Please give me your advice and comments. Thanks

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors- agricultur, manufacturing, and business and finacial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

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8, January 2010, 21:49

pip

My name is Pip Murray and I have been working in......

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Dear Ha70.

This is a reasonable good answer. You have shown that you have good command of grammar and can write in structured paragraphs.

If you wish to benefit from a full appraisal, advice and getting an IELTS score for this essay, you might like to submit the essay via the writing section. There you will be able to paste your essay below the diagram and when we have received payment I will send you your detailed assessment within three working days. This is also true for the other essay you hgave done.

Well done.

Pip

10, January 2010, 08:51

ha70

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Many thanks for your kind advice.

19, January 2010, 00:29

pip

My name is Pip Murray and I have been working in......

Natioality: United Kingdom

Dear Thu Ha

I've looked quicly at the pdf attachment above and if that is your answer to the graph question then I believe you will have no problem getting a very good score. You can get 8 points at the very least. The above essay is 8.5 and needs no advice really. You should be very pleased.

Pip

19, January 2010, 03:57

ha70

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Thanks a lot. ^_^. I really wrote it but it took much more time than 20 minutes. (-_-)